a monk of the mist
I turn into lamp fairy
as the sun goes down
I shall whisper to the clouds
if you tell me a story
I have attempted my first tanka ever. Long verse has always been my comfort zone. But haiku/tanka and other short forms have been my guilty pleasure. I have adhered to the 5-7-5-7-7 format and tried to pen something that reads both back and forth. I hope I have maintained the sanctity of the form.
The city that appears as pious as a monk in the morning mist transforms into a fairy of the lamps. The wicks are raised and lit, and it’s storytelling time. Our stories do have the potential to touch the sky.
Happy tanka tuesday!
6 thoughts on “tanka for tuesday”
Beautiful composition Daya!
Thanks Radhika 😊 . So happy you liked it. Am very conscious if it’s not a free verse!
I love haiku’s and tankas. They challenge us to convey our thoughts and ideas within a defined boundary. You did a good job Daya 👍
Lovely. I’m fairly new to writing TANKA.
This is lovely.
Thank you. Your appreciation means a lot. Getting the count right while keeping the brevity is quite tricky. In awe of people who do it effortlessly. This took a while to get right! Happy we are in this together!
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